So I have to get this down, so I can come back to it and expound on it later. I do a lot of traveling for my job. In those travels, I often am accompanied by other people. Because of excessive speeding tickets and habit... I have a radar detector. Now this past trip, my friend driving this time, got a ticket because the radar was muted (and he was speeding)... so I got to experience first had what it's like to sit in the other seat when being pulled over (maybe I have in the past, but not that I can remember). So here's an idea inspired by that last and a few prior trips...
Disclaimer: None of the crimes are true, just thought it would enhance an already juicy story...
Here goes nothing...
Two coworkers traveling home from trip to Elko, NV have run in with Johnny law. "A" having experienced many traffic stops, looks at this one as being targeted yet again by the police and their "have nothing better to do" actions. "B" hasn't been pulled over in a long time, but was speeding/driving this time.
While two men are talking initially to officers, A gets out of hand. Though not in trouble until he opens his mouth, gets pulled out of car and put in squad car under arrest. B waits patiently for his ticket, pulls concealed weapon and opens fire on cop 1, then quickly fires on cop 2 as well.
A & B freak out, realize what happened, come up with idea to save their skins. Put police in car, pull off up the road and wait for another speeder. Pull him/her over shoot her, then stage whole thing. Take their ticket, leave all, and head home.
Later on, things catch up with them, years after they got away with it. Although murdered cops last confirmed stop was A&B's stop... since B left signed ticket on clipboard in squad car, crime "took place" down the road at different stop, and since B paid his fine, he was never was linked to crime.
A & B had some sort of falling out. Now no longer friends...
Either A turns in B with journal entry (found after commits suicide), or
B is wanted for past burglaries and gets pulled over again... Police link him to prior murders... B drags A into mess too.
So far I've got a scene into this, taking it from a different angle... but let me know what you think? Story good enough to watch? Interesting? Any reservations?
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This could make for a good short film... It reminds me of other movies where a simple situation gets out of control REALLY quickly. Korean cinema takes this approach a lot and usually the endings are always dark and twisted.
ReplyDeleteI'm not so sure about the suicide approach but would rather enjoy seeing how this decision changed the course of their lives... either for good or bad... but mostly bad.
Good work. Fine tune it and you're set. Change the locale to somewhere else. I can't think of where... but somewhere else.
-Cody